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Catch the stars, lover,
Grasp them in your hands,

Take the stars darling,
Place them in your heart,

Catch the stars, lover,
One of them may be,

Mine.
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Adonael Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
A very sweet use of stars, being they're shiny and all that jazz.
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avie-blake Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012
lol I do have a weakness for shiny things! Thanks for reading :)
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Adonael Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Realistically speaking, who doesn't?? =P

No worries :)
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livinglifeoutloud Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012
awe this makes me sooo happy inside <3 :hug:
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:iconavie-blake:
avie-blake Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012
I'm so glad!
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starell Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012
This is so beautiful! Its simplicity is perfect!
I feel like for something so small it expresses a very big concept quite successfully
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:iconavie-blake:
avie-blake Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012
*blush* That means a lot, thank you!
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starell Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
You are very welcome!
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slowlysailing Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I really like this!
it's unique and I like the repetition of the
stanzas.

However, I think the place them in your
heart and having my heart at the end is
redundant. I was almost expecting it to be
'one of them may be,
mine'
instead of my heart. :shrug:

Great piece. It's cute and I enjoyed reading it! :heart:
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:iconavie-blake:
avie-blake Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012
I'm glad you liked it! Great suggestion, I hope you don't mind if I use it?
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slowlysailing Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
not at all :D
i leave suggestions in hope
that people will use them. :huggle:
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